Tiffany Whittaker
English 91
Kaiserman
25 September 2014
The
World with Prius
This year is believed
to be the hottest summer yet, most also believe we can blame global warming;
best bet is to go green. Toyota provides an advertisement for consumers that if
you drive a Prius the earth will break out into joy and dance when you drive
by. Toyota Prius is an electric car pushed to consumers to solve our many high
emission pollution problems. This dealer has begun to push hybrid vehicles in
hopes of creating a big effect in our O-Zone layer.
Toyota
promise drivers the experience of earthly happiness; these claims are
supportable only by the fact that Prius is an electric car and will not put off
large emissions. However plants will not come to life and dance for you while
driving down the road. Prius also provides great gas mileage as show in their advertisement,
along with great savings from high MPG. Driving Prius gives consumers great
savings at the pump but also helps the environment strive.
Toyota
provides consumers with the ability to save money and help the environment with
a safe efficient vehicle. Toyota’s main cause for the advertisement is of
course to sell their product; Toyota also wants to appeal to consumers of
quality drivers, with money saving values. We all know about California having noticeable
smog cover Prius has been the first attempt at reducing emission clouds, and
that has spoken to many consumers alone, shown to be another big reason for
Toyota Prius advertisements.
1. The opening line does contain a hook. It is obvious that there is an attention grabber in the introduction. The opening is clear and to the point.
ReplyDelete2.Reading the introduction it leaves room for a debate and questioning as to how Toyota is moving forward exactly with their new Pruis. The opening does indeed introduce the reader to the ad. Yes, if a student or anyone for that matter were to stumble upob your blob they would be able to read your blog with new problems.
3. " This dealer has begun to push hybrid vehicles in hopes of creating a big effect in our O-Zone layer" I am uncertain if this is your thesis statement or not but I believe it to be your thesis statement. Going green is a great way to go, but getting people to transition over from fossil fuels to all electric is going to be the challenge. Money these days is not exactly laying around for me to go buy a new car.
4. The thesis is clear and to the point. I would clearly agree with you on this topic. Your thesis is descriptive and significant
Jordan Riley
ReplyDeleteEnglish 91
Professor Kaiserman
26 September 2014
Exploratory Peer Review
1) The opening line contains a great attention grabber that feels like the beginning of an interesting conversation. Well done.
2) The opening as a whole gives the reader ample background information and can be easily fallowed by a reader who has never seen or heard about the Prius line of cars. This being said, I feel that a bit of revision could be done to set up the essay in more of a discussion debate style format as apposed to just telling the reader what the product is all about. Then back the claims being made with the information you have given us, because it is definitely filled with valid information about the Prius, that will strongly support a thesis that is open to debate.
3) Thesis: Toyota Pruis is an electric car pushed to consumers to solve our many high emission problems. This dealer has begun to push hybrid vehicles in hopes of creating a big effect on our O-Zone layer.
4) This thesis presents a clear argument that is going to be addressed throughout the essay. It seems descriptive on the hopes of the dealers intent on making positive changes to our planet.